What happen to being real if I was a person who was like a president or something the rules would be if you murdered a person depending on your reasons you would get 50 years because people these days get killed because they have on Reebok and the other person have on ones or because he had 1000 dollars and I only had 100 or because u got 20s and he got 24s those reasons deserve 50 years no less than probation in 35 years Betrayal depending on what you do the way I feel u deserve to die because you supposed to be a true friend and they trust you but in 20 years they decide to get them killed for that you deserve to die Revenge shouldn’t be illegal because some people need what’s coming to them if someone killed your whole family and you know who did it why cant you kill them but that’s just me thinking theft what ever you take you hands deserve to get chopped off because you had no business stealing from a man woman older person crack head or child that’s not right just because you don’t have and want you take that’s what jobs or drugs are for and cheating you need your tongue cut from your mouth because if you love someone you should love them not lie to them and sleep with other women or men to me a relationship is a matter of emotion and trust.
CORTEZ JONES
ROOM 401
5th period
1 comment:
I like your content and i feel what you are saying. However, You need some periods and some commas. Put one period after each thought. You also have some subject verb agreement mistakes. To show you what i mean i corrected the first paragraph of your essay:
What HAPPEND to being real(?) if I was a person ,like a president or something,the rules would be if you murdered a person, depending on your reasons, you would get 50 years. PEOPLE these days get killed because they have on Reebok and the other person have on ones. THEY GET KILLED because he had 1000 dollars and I only had 100DOLLARS.
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